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Fire in the soul
« Thread Started on Dec 8, 2005, 7:53pm »
Fire in the soul *January 23, 2004*



A fire inside my soul,
Nowhere to go.
Just Like a candle,
It burns until it is gone.
It doesn't affect me like you think,
im just stronger than you.

All I see is darkness,
which will never turn to light,
but I will never fear.

It feels like I am skating through the dark,
And keep on falling like you wanted.

Tears in my eyes,
thinking of all the pain.

My heart is bleeding from life.
Life is nothing but betrayal,
Betrayal from everyone.
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Re: Fire in the soul
« Reply #1 on Dec 9, 2005, 6:39pm »
I like the poem quite a bit. Constructive criticism: the flow seems kind of off (it might help if you had a similar amount of syllables in every line or every other line), and you should use "than" instead of "then" at the end of the first stanza. Other than that, it's great. :)
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Re: Fire in the soul
« Reply #2 on Dec 10, 2005, 4:25pm »
I made this poem almost two years ago, lol. My opinion, my poetry got better. Also thanks for the help about the grammer, I never even noticed it.
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Re: Fire in the soul
« Reply #3 on Dec 14, 2005, 7:17pm »
Lol, you should post your later works. I would like to read (and possibly critique, it's what I do :P) them. :)
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